Sunday, April 17, 2011
Editing is Fun
For this week’s editing mistake, I wanted to use my roommate’s choice of words. He said this new device he bought “kills all your dead skin.” If the skin is already dead, then how could you kill it? Everyday language is not edited though, so I will tell about the real mistake I found. This piece of work appeared in the Desert News:
He also wasn't a head a coach. Ever. Not at any point in his career. Krystkowiak, even if briefly, can say he was. Yes, it was for only two seasons and they happened five and six years ago, but that's still two more than Boylen brought to the table.
There isn’t really a way to make that first sentence work. These weekly editing mistakes have really been fun.
One Last Hurrah!
Here is a funny grammar fail that I found. Hard to be scared of a guy who has this abomination for a tattoo.
Page Design
The most educational thing for me was learning about what designs just don't work. Before I just thought that as long as you had some pictures and some text, it was alright, but when I started reading about designs that really don't work, I realized that the look is almost more important than the information. I began to notice more why certain stories in the newspaper appealed more to me than others, and it wasn't just how interesting the story sounded, but how interesting it looked.If it was a story with no pictures, or a really long leg, it didn't look iteresting at all, but if it had a picture, especially a big picture, I was immediately drawn to it. The same goes for books or websites. We all know that we judge books by their covers, even if we shouldn't, and that visual element catches the reader way before the actual content does.
The editing mistake I found this week is one of my biggest pet peeves. I got a letter from one of my friends that said, "I'm doing good." Maybe it's just the English major in me, but is it really that hard to say I'm doing well?
Good Photos
Good photos also need to be cropped well. If a photo is cropped too tightly, you lose important aspects of the scene. If it's not cropped tight enough, the reader will be too distracted with the background. It's important to make sure a story has good photos to go with it because readers are attracted to the visual elements of the page. If a story doesn't have an attractive layout, the story may never get read.
Now to tell you about the last editing mistake for this semester. I was anchoring Weber State News, and a couple of the stories had horrible grammar. I have no idea who edited the stories, but they should have changed the wording. It was hard to read. If the editor of that show had read through the scripts, they would have realized words were missing from some of the sentences. Luckily, I was able to add in the words myself, but this shows editing is important in both print and broadcast settings.
Art Balance
If an editor refuses art balance, the page will look lopsided as well as confusing. Lopsided papers, while not necessarily a major grievance, just look weird. I have a hard time reading visually strange pages because I can't get the odd look out of my head.
Balancing art anchors the page. With a good dominant picture and with proper placement, the page will lend itself to being read easily.
I found an editing mistake in a brochure proclaiming that chickens shouldn't live in coops, but nice hotels. Because, you know, chickens totally need to be pampered to make eggs. The brochure said, "Spare chickens by stopping a bus." I'm guessing it was supposed to be abuse, but maybe we should all stop buses. For the chickens.
A Great Typo Hunt
Hippa Lay?
Jumping
This weeks editing mistake is terrible. Whoever designed and or edited this sign needs to be fired. Every word in this sign with the exception of exit is misspelled. It should read as follows:
Business
Rothschild
Schofield
This is yet another example of an obvious lack of editing. If the person who made this sign simply looked and it, people around the country would not be making fun of exit 185 on highway 51.
Saturday, April 16, 2011
Week 10
Week 12
Week 13
Week 14
Last week of school! :)
Wednesday, April 13, 2011
The Last Post
Below the logo and company name in the top left corner, the nonprofit status is listed. This is one of the first things a site visitor would notice. The categories at the top are primly placed above the art so they can be easily noticed and utilized by the reader. The thing I love most about this site is the dominant art which is both interactive and user friendly.
At the bottom of the page are three square-ish boxes: a performance calendar, newsletter sign up and “Find us on Facebook.” As a site user, these three squares are a letdown. The squares are SO boring! The problem could be remedied by something as small as spacing them differently. Another option is to make them into links and place them at the top of the page with the others, lessening the clutter at the bottom of the page and focusing more on the art.
Apart from the boring squares at the bottom, the background is pretty boring and could be more visually interesting without being distracting. The logo (the cartooned treble clef in the top left corner) could be better utilized by making it slightly more prominent.
Overall, the site is extremely user friendly and visually interesting. There are a few things that ought to be changed to better the visual aspect of the site. The art in the middle of the page is dominant and eye catching as well as user friendly and visually interesting.
My editing mistake for the week was, again, found at my work. We have an in-house phone directory (just one sheet of paper) that is poorly formatted. It's scattered and hard to read. Also, area codes exist only on some of the numbers, on others it is assumed that they are (801) area codes.
Monday, April 11, 2011
Web Design, Shmeb Design
I have a hard time WANTING to learn as well as understanding story and web design. It is not something I am remotely interested in, but i understand it is good for me to learn. So I did my best to learn from the readings and my own observations. I decided to dedicate this blog to what I learned from a website I frequent often.
Bravo TV Website
http://www.bravotv.com/
This is a site I frequent often since my guilty pleasure is watching The Real Housewives franchise series. I can’t always watch the episodes for lack of time, but they do have the videos on the site, so it is a good website to kill time at the doctor’s office on my cell phone. I think the website could be a lot better technologically speaking, but as far as a layout, it is fairly good.
As far as the website’s layout and design, it is aesthetically pleasing to me-someone who is not a layout and design pro. So from my standpoint it is great, there is a slideshow of visuals and lots of bright colors. It also isn’t too overrun with ads that usually seem to clutter most websites. I think they could utilize a lot more of their space and not make the site so choppy but a lot of their work is done in the rectangle format discussed in the reading.
I think the art supplements the pictures and does not confuse the text. The pictures are place in the appropriate places, with little room for confusion. It adds motion to the page as your eye starts from the top and works its way down. It takes advantage of optical weight by using a larger, dominating picture at the top and the text and pictures get smaller as you scroll down the page. The site’s visual strategy is effective in use of text paired with pictures.
Just a quick grammar fail for this week's post.
Sunday, April 10, 2011
Story Design
The design and layout of a story is yet another piece included in making the story attractive to the reader. By now we have learned all about the lead. It is the first part of the story. It gives a preview and determines whether the content of the story is interesting enough to the reader. There is also the headline. It needs to tell about the story and why it is important without giving away too much information. We also learned how to fit the headline with the rest of the story. But there is a lot more to it than just fitting the headline in with the article. Another design that must be taken into consideration when designing the story is how to format the text. It can be formatted either vertically or horizontally. If there is art included in the story, such as a mug shot or photo(s), then their placement in addition to the placement of the text and headline can either make or break the readers attraction to the story. I really enjoyed learning about the different techniques involved in formatting stories in order to make them the best looking. The journalism field certainly requires talent in a wide variety of areas, not just writing.
The editing mistake I found for this week is from an article that appeared in the Deseret News. The paragraph goes as follows: The intentional burn was lit by a duck club in order to rid the wetland area of phragmites. Phragmites are an invasive plant the grow so densely, they can choke out native cattails, reeds and grasses, according to the Utah Division of Wildlife Resources. “…an invasive plant the grow so densely…” doesn’t work.
Working with Writers
1. Understand the material you are editing. If we understand the material we are editing, it would make it easier, and possibly less necessary, to edit.
2. Make sure writer understands your edits. I have edited many papers for friends and family and they have asked e about my edits. If the writer understands the edits that you made, they might be able to know what mistakes they are making.
3. Correct only what you believe is wrong. Work with the writer when trying to determine what is really correct. You may make an editing error that might have been intentional.
4. Take yourself out of the editing element and try to understand the message. As editors, it is important to understand the content we are reading. Instead of being critical of every mistake, maybe we should look at the message rather than the way it is written.
5. Look to the writer for help when editing. The writer can be a good source to use when trying to figure out how to effectively edit their story.
Here’s a funny grammar mistake:
Placement
Story Design
Story Design
The editing mistake I found this week was in my brother's essay. He wrote, "I have always wanted to sea the see." He confused the words sea and see. He's only in sixth grade, so the mistake is understandable. It made me laugh when I saw it, so I thought I would share it with you.
Working With Writers
1. Coach an aspiring writer as much as possible. This should not just be a specific time. Writers often have ideas on a spur of the moment notice, so make yourself as available as possible.
2. Balance an open mind with realistic expectations –A writers writing is not your writing, so be aware that there will be differences, however with realistic goals that need to be achieved remind your writer about the path that you want them to take.
3. When either one of you mess up, talk about it together –No one is perfect, so when mistakes do happen, fix the problem together.
4. Maintain a positive attitude at all times –As a writing coach or any coach for that matter, staying positive will help the understudy focus on the task at hand.
5. Edit you work over and over again –When coaching a writer, I would recommend that the writer analyze their work at least four or five times to check for inconsistencies, grammatical errors and style.
This weeks editing mistake had to have been done on purpose. There is absolutely no way anyone could have missed this. I don't know if this is would be considered an editing mistake or if the employee was subconsciously correlating the new "hiring shifts" with the food at Taco Bell.
Saturday, April 9, 2011
Tips for working with writers
1. Take an interest in the writers’ outside lives. Obviously when it’s crunch time you don’t want to sit and ask how their kids are doing, but there’s always ways to find time to find out a little more about the human behind the writer. The better of a rapport you can get with your writers, the better team you’ll make.
2. Encourage a little creative wiggle room. Newspapers have been changing a little bit recently to keep up with the times, and I think a little more creativity in the writing would go a long way. I think so many journalists are afraid of stepping away from what they know works, but after a while, the conventions get boring.
3. Leave your bad mood at home. This is hard, but I think it’s essential when you’re working with someone else’s work. If they see you’re in a bad mood, they may assume that it’s because of their writing, and this’ll cause problems.
4. Read writing outside of work. The more you read, the better editor you’ll be. You’ll find new things that you like, and some that you want to stay away from.
5. Love what you do. This may seem like a duh thing, but I’ve seen too many people who quickly become frustrated with editing. Editing can be just as fun and creative a process as writing. It can lead you to discover something new. Go about it with enthusiasm, and it’ll rub off on your writers.
Now onto the editing mistake. I found this from a news release on the website Rotten Tomatoes: "The Tomb would be directed by Antoine Fuqua (Training Day, King Arthur), and is about an architect who must escape from the super prison that helped design." It should read, "who must escape from the super prison that he helped design." It doesn't make much sense if you leave out the 'he'!
Friday, April 8, 2011
Know Your Stuff
Being a good writing coach is really important. To accomplish this, you must know how to write. These are my five tips.
1. Know your stuff. Know the basic mechanics of various aspects of writing such as editing, grammar and punctuation.
2. Offer to help. Offering to edit other people’s writing will keep you on your toes and help them with their writing abilities.
3. Read. Read material from different forms of media. This expands your personal vocabulary and writing style.
4. Write. How can you be a writing coach if you don’t write?
5. Keep up. Keep up with the changes going on around you. As a journalist, I rely heavily on the AP Stylebook. I have to keep up with the changes made in the Stylebook.
My editing mistake for the week is actually a mistake I made. A few weeks ago, we had an assignment dealing with headlines. I wrote this as one of my headlines: "Bill Proposes Allowing Concealed Weapons On Campus Grounds." Dr. J reminded me not to capitalize the first letter of each word. She said to use downstyle. Her exact wording was: “Use downstyle where you capitalize words as you do in a sentence. Don't do what the stodgy New York Times does.” Her response was helpful and educational. Thanks Sheree!
Wednesday, April 6, 2011
Working with Writers
5 Tips I Came Up With
1. Don’t act like a know-it-all. Nothing bugs me more than when someone editing my paper acts like they know everything about the subject I am writing about.
2. Watch your tone. You can say all the right things but the way you are speaking could rub the writer the wrong way. You may be in charge of their writing, but not their life.
3. Keep margin comments brief. Don’t get too marker-happy and scratch out all their hard work.
4. It is not your job to rewrite the story. If the story is not what you are looking for in your paper, talk to the writer and have them fix their own work. Don’t go over their head and fix it yourself.
5. Don’t edit the paper until the writer is finished or they ask you. Don’t ask for the paper and start marking it up. Wait until the writer is done, then edit it.
So there you have it! Now when any of you are editing my papers, please have this printed out next to you while doing so.
The editing mistake I found this week was driving on 4th south in Salt Lake. I tried to take a picture but I was driving and didn't want to die. It was a church reader-board that read "Have your life saved BUY Jesus." I thought it was amusing.
Book Report
This weeks editing mistake was taken in our own student services center in the Weber State University main campus. This is an example of a careless mistake. "No Deposet" is not correct. It should read "No Deposit". A simple run through of this flier would have probably eliminated this mistake, so make sure to look over work over and over again until you are satisfied of the result, or run the risk having it posted up as an example of poor editing.
Sunday, April 3, 2011
Eats, Shoots & Leaves
I had the opportunity to read “Eats, Shoots & Leaves”, by Lynne Truss for my book report. It was definitely a good read with a lot of great insights. It also helped me realize how much I’ve taken punctuation for granted. Simply omitting or changing the punctuation can drastically change the meaning of what has been written. This is just one example given in Truss book:
“A woman, without her man, is nothing.”
Compared with:
“A woman: without her, man is nothing.”
The book also gives a good definition of punctuation and what it is for, comparing punctuation to traffic signals. Punctuation leads us on the correct path through written words. It tells us when to slow down (such as with a comma or semicolon), when to stop (such as with a period of question mark), and when to notice something (such as with quotation marks).
With the popularity of text messaging and social media today, proper punctuation is not taken seriously. Lynne Truss makes the call for punctuation sticklers to unite, and use proper punctuation even when sending a text message to your friends.
Now for the editing mistake this week:
About 7:45 p.m. Saturday, police responded reports of shots being fired at the Far West Motel, 410 N. Main. Officers arrived to find that 52-year-old Gregory Nance had been fatally shot. He was pronounced dead at the scene.
This appeared in a Deseret News story. It was breaking news so they likely posted it as soon as possible without properly editing and fixing all of the mistakes.
Rewind
(ok, it wasn't those words exactly, but something to that effect)
"The big final rule for the comma is one that you won’t find in any books by grammarians. It is quite easy to remember, however. The rule is: don’t use commas like a stupid person. I mean it. More than any other mark, the comma requires the writer to use intelligent discretion and to be simply alert to potential ambiguity."
That's all I have for today. I am all written out. That book report took it out of me.
Oh, editing mistake.
I got a thank you card yesterday. (I know it is horrible I'm calling this woman out after how thoughtful her thank you card was but oh well) The whole card was really nice and sweet and gushy but the whole time she was meaning to say "YOU'RE" (9 times) she wrote YOUR. It was hard to read about what a great person and friend I was when I was thinking about the bad spelling the whole time.
I am going to hell for sharing that.